NaPoWriMo 2018 day 18: the wind on a not so brilliant day

I tried to tend it, but nature overwhelmed my efforts

What’s the point of even trying

with all that withering around me.

Yes, take the leaves and petals, leave the ground free and clean

as I want to face life, not death.

All the flowers are gone, and I want them back

No, you can’t take their smell away from me

and I’m not sure about your odour of jasmine.

If it’s meant to be the call of my soul

then I’ll wait for the wind to blow it in.

 

This is an upside-down take on original poem The Wind, One Brilliant Day, by Antonio Machado

The wind, one brilliant day, called
to my soul with an odor of jasmine.

‘In return for the odor of my jasmine,
I’d like all the odor of your roses.’

‘I have no roses; all the flowers
in my garden are dead.’

‘Well then, I’ll take the withered petals
and the yellow leaves and the waters of the fountain.’

the wind left. And I wept. And I said to myself:
‘What have you done with the garden that was entrusted to you?’

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4 thoughts on “NaPoWriMo 2018 day 18: the wind on a not so brilliant day

  1. “What’s the point of even trying

    with all that withering around me” got me thinking — the point may be BECAUSE of all the withering going round. Dunno. But glad you got me thinking about it all. Thanks.

    • I think it is. The original is a poem about hurting the planet, but really it’s about death and wasted opportunity. Thank you for recognising that aspect of the poem and for stopping by to comment.

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